"Learning how to grow" --- Teaser --- Feedback wanted!

[qaz]

Here's the first chapter for an upcoming story I'm working on. I've been writing it bit by bit for a long time. Now I'm wrapping up chapter 9/10, it's not going to be too long before it's all done and good to go.

As it has been a pretty big work for me, I wanna make sure that when I put it out it's as good as it can be. So I'm going to post the first chapter here and ask your feedback on the writing quality and the enjoyability

It's a realstic story about a woman who embraces her drive to build a phenomenal body. The core of the story is the transformation journey she goes through in order to satisfy an extremely deep desire. As the story progresses the sexual aspect becomes more and more important.

Regarding the themes, obviously everyone has their own cup of tea. This story focuses on what I like. But I also wrote it to feel as real as possible. So I'd like to know if that has been achieved.

The first chapter is an establishing chapter more than anything. Further along, circumstances are going to change, and the language might as well, a bit. But I think people should be able to tell from it whether something in my writing is not working for them.

Lastly: At the beginning of every chapter I list references to real women in this site for the characters' size and muscularity. I'd like to know what people think of that.

[qaz]

EPISODE 1

body reference:

Anne (last part of episode): Jacinta Beecher




The roads seemed emptier than usual as Anne was being driven to the train station by her parents. The absence of traffic had made the journey even quicker than what it should have been. But Anne didn't mind, she was actually looking forward to the new chapter of her life. Anne had landed her first job at a software company. Having lived with her parents throughout university, to save money, she would now have the opportunity to be truly free. It was going to be her money, her home, her life. Obviously to get there she needed to get on that flight.

The opportunity couldn't have come at a better moment for her. Anne had been a shy and solitary girl all her life, and only lately she had started to desire more out of her life. In the last year or so she had felt more and more hungry for anything that she had never tried. Being as inexperienced as she was, this kind of enthusiasm had obviously costed her a few mishaps in the last months. But she had also made some good memories. Now she knew she needed to turn the page.

It had all started during the previous summer, while she was on holiday in Spain with her friends Susie and Jane. It was the last day; they were at the beach. They had found a spot on the back, next to a free beach volley court. Two couples had, at one point, come to play in the court, they seemed only a few years older than Anne and her friends. All four of them were tanned and very, very fit. They had thick yet defined muscular bodies.

Naturally after a while Anne's girlfriends had started to, now and then, casually glance at the two bare-chested muscular guys, making sassy comments between them, joking about it. Anne too, did participate in this game, but... there was something else. While she certainly appreciated the guys' bodies, she (inexplicably) could not stop looking at the two girls that were with them. She had never seen women with bodies like theirs. They were incredibly fit. No, they were muscular! Anne had never seen a female body like those, they looked... powerful, so, so full of power. Their muscles bulged when they jerked forward and jumped in the midst of the game, their physiques were marvels in continuous evolution. Anne had seen female volleyball players, these two women were nothing like that. They were much more muscular. The two girls would have easily been the most muscular people on the beach as far as Anne could see, were it not for their two boyfriends, who were slightly bigger than them.

Before she even realized it, Anne was entranced by the sight of these two women. She gradually stopped listening to what her friends were saying, and slowly her eyes got more and more sucked-in in admiring these two amazons. She looked at the way they moved, she looked at their powerful legs and firm butts, she looked at their beautiful smiles, at their wide shoulders, muscular arms and back while new shapes constantly revealed themselves on their bodies under the sun.

After who knows how long, Anne's friend Jane snapped her fingers just in front of Anne's left eye.

"Hey there... anybody home?!"

"Oh... what?" the spell was broken, and Anne was back to reality

"Me and Susie are going for a swim, you coming?"

"Oh... yes, yes, let's go"

"Check out Annie..." said her friend Susie, who had noticed in which direction Anne had been looking when she was distracted "...you were just eating those guys up weren't you?"

Anne was caught off guard, still confused by what had just happened inside her. "Oh? Well, I... eh-was... was just noticing how... well they're all very fit people"

"Oh, hell yeah they are!" remarked Jane sassily

"Well, so what?! Even if I was looking at them, we all were before, right?!" asked Anne

"Yeah, we were. But me and Jane were like, really chill about it. Girl, you had a look in your eyes... I don't even know how to describe it, like this" then Susie tried to replicate Anne's entranced voracious expression.

"Ooof" remarked Jane at the impression "that's some big creep energy! Shame I missed it. Well, it seems like even quiet Annie can be a little naughty sometimes"

"Oh, stop it you're exaggerating it!" replied Anne "how about that swim?"

"Yes, let's go, somebody needs to cool down a bit, amiright?" joked Jane, winking at Anne. And with that the girls took off.

The rest of the day Anne continued to be careful not to give herself away too clearly, but she just couldn't stop going back with her eyes at those two women. She certainly found the two men that were with them attractive as well, but there was just something about those women that really made them irresistible. It was the way that power, strength, burly muscles were perfectly conjugated with a feminine body, that made those women incomprehensibly attractive to Anne.

Up to that point Anne had always been quite discreet about her sexual interests, she had had a few crushes over the years, on boys, but nothing had ever come of it because they either were in strong relationships already, or she was too shy to make a move. Either way, she had never been attracted to another girl. She considered herself plainly heterosexual and had never had any reason to think otherwise, that is... until that day at the beach. She was attracted to these beautiful muscular women playing beach volley, "attracted" was the only right word, sexually attracted.

She also started to compare, in the back of her head, her body to those gorgeous ones she could observe. She imagined how the powerful muscles of these women would look like on her body, she imagined how it would have felt like, if her body were like theirs. She pictured all the differences between her unexceptional figure and the chimeric physiques of the two women. Eventually the two couples left the court, and the daydream was no more. But it left a void in Anne’s heart that wouldn’t go away.

When Anne got home the next day, she immediately used the privacy to go on the internet to look for more photos of women like the ones she had seen at the beach. She craved to look at more of these sculpted feminine bodies. And she found them, she found a lot of incredible examples. The more she looked, the more she lusted for new pictures. She ended up completely entranced in the sinewy sceneries visible on these women's bodies. Picture after picture, the women Anne saw were making her hornier and hornier. Seconding the heartwarming feeling, she slowly slid a hand down her body, and started gently stroking her wet vagina according to her inner rhythm. Those bodies! She wanted those bodies! She wanted to caress them, feel them. Those women were hotter that what Anne thought was humanly possible. Oh! The power in their muscles, the hard shapes of meat that pulsed and bulged, the sweat glistening on those feminine curves... Anne lingered on a video of a buff figure athlete training with great intensity, watching it on repeat. She imagined that woman lying with her, she imagined her own hand was hers, driving her pleasure higher and higher, she imagined that strong body embracing hers... Anne breathed heavy moans as she orgasmed in a pool of warm pleasure. Her mind wrapped up in imaginary worship of muscular female bodies, she lost track of time as she repeated the routine until her hunger was fulfilled.

As she laid on her bed, relaxed and spent, with the arousal slowly waning, she suddenly had a realization: She craved feminine muscles... but she was woman herself! She could get for herself a body like those that were making her SO horny. This was what she needed! She was lucky enough to be a healthy young woman, she was totally capable of achieving that. Her own body would be the perfect object of her desire, always in reach, always in her control. She was going to get a phenomenal physique, one that would drive her crazy like those she was looking at! One that would put any other woman to shame...After this revelation she smiled wickedly at the ceiling. Her mind was set.

Anne started to regularly exercise at home. She rearranged the furniture in her room to make space for a workout zone, she bought some adjustable dumbbells, a bench... overall a basic kit that could last her a while. She also completely restructured her summer schedule around her workouts.

The first times she tried her hand at it were a harsh awakening, however. She was slim and able-bodied, but she was weak. She struggled visibly to complete exercises that were performed easily in the tutorials she watched, she struggled to keep up with the supposed rhythm of the cardio workouts she tried, and it took some time to find a workout that she was able to complete and could use as a first starting point.

Sure enough though, Anne was unabated by these difficulties, and after the first few workouts she was already feeling the benefits: as her body -and mind- became used to physical struggle, her energy levels increased, as did the grit she showed during her exercises. This meant that after a dozen days went by, Anne was already able to move to bolder and more challenging routines. This obviously translated to better actual progress in strength and endurance. After the first few weeks Anne could feel the first benefits of her workouts: even though visually she didn't see much change, for the first time in her life she could feel herself becoming stronger and fitter. Even if her muscles were not defined and visible, she undeniably felt stronger and sturdier. Seeing this kind of progress made Anne also more and more enthusiastic about challenging herself, pushing herself further and further with every workout. Every time she exercised, she found a way to scale her routine up a notch, always proud to see her improvements.


Furthermore, as soon as her progress started, Anne discovered that she loved the intense feelings that she derived from working her muscles to exhaustion. Powering through the reps to raise the weights up -or her own body-, feeling the pain in her flesh during the sets and the energizing rush that came after them, were a true revelation to her.

Anne's motivation to workout had already been solid from the beginning -it was to get for herself the body she wanted- but after a couple of weeks Anne became utterly addicted to the sensations she experienced during her workouts. So her approach to her training changed: her routines became a way to chase that special feeling.

The best way to do that, was to go through pain, and push past it. Anne kept going till failure in many of her sets and started doing drop sets and super-sets. (She might not have known they were called like that, but it was what she was doing). She would work her muscles to a numb pulp before giving up and resting. This allowed her to connect with the ecstatic feeling she craved.

Every time she approached failure her face started to contort in pain, her neck would fill with angry pulsating veins. If she knew she was alone at home, she also made a point of grunting as loudly as she needed to during reps. Anne had discovered that doing so allowed her to increase her adrenaline and tap deeper into her primal side. Even among all this pain, it was not uncommon for Anne to have a wicked and proud smile on her face while working out. The rush of extreme physical exertion just felt too good... it was different from the usual orgasm, yet just as entrancing and powerful.

With time, Anne's improvement began to show even to the eyes. For the first few weeks the only progress that Anne had been able to see was an overall firmer figure. It had been thanks to her newly challenged muscles gaining tone. After more than a month of training though, the "beginner gains" finally started to show clearly on her. 'Oh my goddd!' she thought, looking at herself after a great workout one day. She noticed that her muscles were... pumped! Her little muscles filled with blood looked less tiny than usual, her body looked like she had made another month worth of progress compared to an hour before.

The abs were arguably Anne's most developed area, she could admire 4 (maybe 6?) hard shallow blocks of muscle, that played hide and seek on her tummy, and revealed themselves when she flexed them. Her shoulders actually showed some shallow meat on top of her bones, giving them a more harmonious shape. Her small deltoids were clearly evident when she raised her arms vertically. In front of the mirror Anne repeatedly flexed her biceps and could see the small bump of muscle in her arms respond to her commands. Her biceps were slender, but hard, just like her triceps on the other side of her toned arms. Her legs were somewhat pumped too, even though that day she had focused on abs and upper body: the slender shapes that she could now see certainly were not there before she had started her training. She was very proud that her legs were not formless twigs anymore. Lastly Anne's calves were actually the muscles that had grown more, after her abs. It was because Anne loved the feeling of working her calves to exhaustion, feeling them numb and aching gave her great satisfaction, and it showed.

It was the first time that Anne could notice an appreciable difference in her figure since the start of her training. Looking at herself flexing her little muscles got her so excited: she was doing it! She had built from nothing those flexing curves that she could now see on herself.

Anne loved how she looked bigger than usual, and even though she knew that the benefits of a pump were temporary, this only redoubled her motivation: she couldn't wait to look like this even without a pump! And how great would her pumped muscles look by then?! Holy pretzel! What goldmines did the future have in store!

Anne lost herself in these thoughts as she continued to admire her body. Not long after, she was masturbating in front of the mirror in her room. She gently caressed the wet lips of her vagina with one hand, while continuing to squeeze her new little muscles with the other. The combo of muscles and erogenous zone was working wonders. Her abs she found the most pleasing. She flexed them and she fingered, flexed and fingered... flexed and fingered, with ever greater dedication... until she came. The relaxing waves of pleasure repaid her for her efforts, and Anne laid there, satisfied.

Anne's determination was to the stars after seeing tangible proof of her progress. Her workouts became even more intense. She pushed her body to experience pains and physical struggles that made her cry and loose contact with reality. She exhausted all her inner aggression in her workouts. The severity of her routine became nothing short of masochistic.

Unfortunately for Anne, this didn't give great results in the long run. For the first times the only difference was extreme soreness and ever greater pumps (yes!), but soon her body failed to cope with the wear and tear that Anne put it through. Her recovery times increased dramatically, to the point that she was barely able to get one workout per week. This only lead to a rabbit hole where Anne would train excruciatingly hard, trying to make up for the time lost, only to have to stop again and wait till she had recovered.

This dynamic led to a stagnation in Anne's progress. And while Anne did notice that she had lately ground to a halt, she couldn't find an answer to this. She was too entranced in chasing after her own dream and wasn't lucid enough to recognize her errors. For the last month at home, she wasn't able to break out of this cycle.

Now, as she boarded the train to her new home, Anne thought about her frustration with her lack of progress. It seemed she was banging her head on a wall, not able to push through. She hoped that starting a new life would finally help her find her way to her goal... somehow.

[UnholyDk1103]

Nice pacing . Looking forward to more

[jhunter]

Noit bad, good flow. Some decent details. Let's see how things you proceed.

[quick]

Love it.  I really appreciate realistic slow growth.  If it goes a little beyond reality later on, that's cool, but I like keeping it grounded at least for a bit.

[R41N]

I like it. Aside from a few grammatical details that I personally would change, I can’t find anything that I can criticize. The body reference is one way to describe Anne’s physicality, I guess. I’d rather just have it communicated in the story though, personally.
I love your descriptions and I found that the personalities of the characters come across clearly.

Hoping this is going to be a fairly realistic story with an interesting plot and interesting characters.
I’m impressed and can’t wait to read more.

[qaz]

Thanks for all the replies. I appreciate it.

The story is definitely going to remain realistic, as I said.

I like it. Aside from a few grammatical details that I personally would change

If you feel like it (no pressure) I'd like to know more about it

[R41N]

They’re not grammatical (errors), just details I personally would’ve done different.
It would be really nitpicky of me to point them out and very unnecessary. It would be really tedious for me as well.

A captivating story makes it easy to ignore even the largest of mistakes anyway, whatever they may be, s don’t worry about such details.

[qaz]

Ok. Thanks for the clarification

[southbendcarp]

Excellent beginning! Looking forward to more!

[sgsg69]

Great start, writing style and presentation is fine, maybe a bit more detail as to what she does/feels/sees during her workouts.........can't wait for more! KARMA to you

[Wookey]

Super impressive K+. This is a story that I will definitely look out for

[tapion]

I like realistic muscle growth stories ! Pretty good start, keep going;)