Gothic Hannah FMG

[Jayjay78]

My first story. I've read Fictional stories on here and thought I'd try one myself! Please leave feedback. Here's part one

Hannah is a 17 year old, she's had a tough life. She lost both parents very young to a freak accident, which meant Hannah had to move in with her uncle, who really didn't care for her. So growing up was tough.

Growing up she fell into the wrong crowd, bumping school, underage drinking, smoking weed, but she would never touch harder drugs. That was her rule.

Hannah, she had a sort of gothic look, black hair with green streaks in her hair, always wearing black clothing mostly being tights, skirt and hoodies. Black eyeliner, lipstick and nail varnish. But she was a natural beauty, her eyes are bright green, light up a room, and when she rarely smiles it lights the room up.

Because of her rough upbringing she doesn't eat much as it makes her feel sick, so she has a thin petite frame, about 5'3 weighing around 98 pounds, she was confident in her body, as she always claimed her best feature was her perky boobs, Hannah admits they're from her mother.

Hannah was going about her day, after bumping off school she went for a walk, walking along the river seeing 'normal' kids and 'normal' adults going about their life, smiling and laughing. She always wondered - 'why never me' 'why can't I be happy'. She was on anti - depression tablets but they never worked, they wore off quicker than they took to work.

She as she came to the end of the river she took a left through the city, watching herself through the reflection, and catching glimpses of herself and realising she's a pretty girl. She's worth more, she can create a better life for herself. As she was walking she heard a shout 'hey!' So she turned round to see what it was and as she looked behind she bumped into a parking meter. She landed on her back, and quickly got back to her feet - embarrassed she blushed and looked in a reflection of the shop to see if she was in check.

The shop was a eerie, gothic type shop, with weird clothing, and emeralds etc in. Of course this captured Hannah, she walked in and the door rung a bell. A man appeared, a short man with gothic like clothes on but a 'normal' old man's facial features. He asked 'can I help you' - Hannah replied ' I'm just intrigued and having a look'.. she looked around, picking books up, examining emeralds, clothing. Forgetting about wanting to be happier, she had a gloomy look on her face which prompted the shop keeper to ask Hannah 'are you okay miss'? - Hannah replied with a half hearted 'yeahhh.. just life'.

Hannah proceeded to tell the man about her life, what had happened when she was young, her uncle doesn't care and takes his moods out on Hannah, and how the doctors just give her anti depressants.. that don't work.

The man felt sorry for Hannah and spoke to her for a long time, she felt better for chatting but knew as soon as she was back into the real world it would go back to normal. Until he said he had a special tablet that can help Hannah, can enhance her so that she feels good about herself, more and more, releasing chemicals that her body holds to create a positive mindset, telling Hannah the only side effects are they can enhance her body too. Hannah asked 'what do you mean' and he said 'the more you feel good the tablet helps release hormones, endorphins and testosterone to whatever it is that makes you feel that good. So some people enjoy the feeling of their body improving, some people enjoy being brighter, others enjoy other things - you just have to focus, and do something that makes you forget the real life even just for a moment.

End of part 1 

Please leave some K. And I'll have part 2 up soon ❤️

[Jayjay78]

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Part 2 -
Hannah went home with this tablet in her hand, while walking back through a back street she took the tablet, thinking 'what does it matter, what's the worst that can happen' - she took a gulp and awaited changes.. nothing, she waited more, and still nothing just a buzzy feeling.

Hannah continued home, feeling deflated and wondering what she took. If anything this tablet made her feel more depressed, she had some hope that it would improve her. Hannah thought to herself 'I'm sick of this I'm going out' so Hannah threw on some dark clothing, some tight leather black pants, and a black 'boob tube' which gave her some confidence as they made her boobs look incredible.

Out Hannah went, going to the club and getting some shots in right away, 'hard day' the barman asked, 'you wouldn't understand' replied Hannah. As she took this shot, she stumbled back and tripped on this man's foot. 'Sorry' Hannah said, 'no no' the Man replied. 'Woah wait a minute..' Hannah said in a shocked reaction, 'you're the man who shouted hey and made me fall into a parking metre..' - 'oh I'm so sorry about that, I thought you were someone else' the man replied. 'I'm Jerry..' - 'I'm hannah' they both introduced themselves.

Both Hannah and Jerry continued to enjoy their night talking.. and Hannah had forgot for a little while about her depression. 'Did you see that weird shop?' Hannah asked Jerry, 'yeah I pass by all the time.' Hannah told him what had happened - 'so he gave you this tablet that would enhance something to make you happy.. what is that something?' He asked. 'I don't know 'she said confused, 'it doesn't matter now' I will just get on with life..

The night goes on and they start flirting, Hannah doing the most and Jerry couldn't resist, she was after all, beautiful! Hannah had asked Jerry if he was single, and Jerry confirmed that he was.. which lead Hannah to be more flirtatious. Both of them fancying eachother, Hannah thinking this was what the tablet was doing. Making her horny.

Hannah asks Jerry to walk her home.. which he obliged to do, they walk, laughing, having a great time.. Hannah has waited for this, they reach Hannah's front door and she gives him a look, a look that Jerry cannot ignore, she pulls his hand to go inside.. they both stumble into the hallway kissing, and touching. Hannah removes her clothes, and Jerry picks Hannah up and puts her gently down on the sofa, Hannah biting jerrys ear.. they then begin to have sex, slowly.. so if romantically, Hannah feeling.. free.. she felt amazing

5 mins in and it starts to get rough, changing positions, moving over to the bedroom and Hannah is on her back. She feels tingly, the moonlight shines over her pulsating body, it feels as if a organism is coming but from deep.. her veins start to appear, all of her forearms are now pulsating with veins, her flat belly and chest .. Jerry just thinks it's normal but Hannah realises this has never happened, he reaches up to kiss her, she arches her back as he pushed against her crotch and she feels her body tighten she feels a burn and it makes her horny.. she realises she's growing, stronger.. Jerry still hasn't noticed

End of part 2 - let me know what you think! K. Please 🙏

[jhunter]

Not bad for a first shot. Decent flow. Cou;d use more description.

[Jayjay78]

Not bad for a first shot. Decent flow. Cou;d use more description.

Appreciate the feedback.. I'll use more in next part 🙏

[hatour]

Great start. Keep it going.

[Jayjay78]

Great start. Keep it going.

Thank you 🙏

[JamesACole]

For a first time. This flows well, it's fun and I can't wait to see where this story goes. Yeah, keep it up. And I wish you the best of luck.

[wowser1016]

This a good piece of work. I agree with Hunter that a little more description and detail will go a long way. Put yourself in their shoes and put into words as you let your mind explore the direction you want to take. K+!

[peters1967]

A very good start. I'm already looking forward to the sequel. Otherwise, I can only agree with the words of the previous speakers: A little more detailed description and the story gets a little more depth.
K+ from me.

[Jayjay78]

Part 3

Jerry still unaware of Hannah transforming - Hannah taking in this amazing feeling, as if her body is going to explode. She squeezes her fists and curls them up, her forearms expanding in size, it looks like rocks and bulges, the veins sort of glow, not like bright but a glow in the dark type. Her mindset is shifting, she's gaining pleasure from not only the sex but from the feeling the muscles building is giving.

Hannah can't contain it, she shoots her eyes open pulls Jerry in, Jerry gets a shock - thinking "wow she's strong" they both passionately kiss, the burning, intense feeling Hannah has gets more intense, she flips Jerry over lifting him through the air, and pins him on his back in an insane feat of strength. He looks at Hannah, absolutely mesmerised in what's just happened. She looks at him with a devilish look sliding his cock back in her, she places her hands on his stomach, he realised that Hannah has grown more toned.. - he thought "maybe she's always been toned and the sweat is making it look more". Hannah progressively gets tougher and rougher, slamming down, screaming 'omg you're so big', Harry pushes back, as they both passionately kiss. She shudders again, feeling this burning sensation, this time uncontrollably screaming in a orgasm like way, her arms become tighter and swell, she realises again she is growing more and more 'what the hell is this' Hannah thinks.. 'no idea but I like it' she answers herself. She flex's and a baseball like bicep muscle appears.. She smiles and gives a little laugh of, veins pulsating all over, brings up the left and the same happens. Harry is shocked, he doesn't know what's happening but realise it's making him more and more horny, he starts dictating the sex, pushing faster from beneath. Instigating Hannah to claw at his chest, she wraps her muscle arms around his head pulling him into her chest, her perky tits feeling fuller and solid, he starts sucking on her nipple. Hannah twerking, faster and harder, breathing in his ear moaning..

Hannah separates from Jerry a little, Jerry looking at her muscle striations her chest possesses a deep muscle cleveage staring him in the face, and the veins sticking out, glowing, he's absolutely mesmerised by this 'power girl'. Hannah sits up, for a little break, she's laughing and smiling as she feels the power course through her veins. Her thighs by Jerrys side, she notices they've grown, as they've got veins and striations and they're about 10 inches thicker. Hannah wonders how much more she will grow, how strong is she?

End of part 3 I'm gauging motivation from this page, hoping to find some images that could possibly look like Hannah to post in this ❤️ thanks for the support   

[Wookey]

K+. Keep going.

[phil123]

Hope for more and getting bettet an better. Would like it a little slower with more details. But it's YOUR story. Keep going

[jhunter]

Take your time. Practice with others if you can.

[Jayjay78]

Part 4
As Hannah is mesmerising over her gains, still with Jerry inserted in her still rock hard as he has this cute but ripped beauty on his rod - she's playing with her muscles while he's watching, she eyes up the pills but choses to wait. Incase she won't feel the benefit from another one just yet..her veins still protruding she's dripping in horny wet - whispering to Jerry 'do you like what you see?' While kissing her teeth and folding down to give him a peck.. as she does, Jerry feels her muscular back, all the lumps and bumps and the veins, she just eers pure strength.

Hannah after playing with her hard body starts a rhythm on jerrys rod, sending Jerry into another dimension.. he can't control himself, and Hannah is loving it. 'You can't cum in me' she said as hes edging closer.. Hannah, worried lifts Jerry with no effort and lifts him off the bed, and against the wall, jerry- hanging helplessly pinned against the wall, Hannah then goes down on him.

Smiling up, while she just feels so powerful - 'Jerry my body puts yours to shame, I may not be as big.. YET, I'm shredded and so strong, she removes one hand keeping Jerry up still, and flexes her bicep, then grabs jerrys rod and so fast starts jerking him off.. assuring Jerry she's incomplete control..

End of part 4 sorry it's short, I'm gauging for a big part 5! This page is amazing for inspiration! Still looking for some pics to insert to show what kind of body Hannah has grown to so far.. will come in part 5 😏

[sgsg69]

keep going, short but sweet play on the story, let her cut loose and see where this goes....Karma to you!!