Nuunar -- The Demon Invasion Teaser; Appraise Me, Father!

[Vollnut]

Nuunar -- The Demon Invasion Teaser; Appraise Me, Father!

This is a teaser for a story I've been working on for a my character Nuunar (stupid name, I know), a superheroine fiction with muscles, battle, feats of power and strength, all wrapped in layer of bad comedy.

An evil demonic father evaluates the might of his little girl before sending her to battle.

Hope you enjoy! Just a teaser, but C&C welcome, I'm always looking to improve.


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On a barren, ravaged world that bore the light of twin suns, a tear in space formed, and they walked through, into the street of what was once a grand city of stone and marble. The wind whistled, blowing through broken windows and around dusty alleyways, but otherwise silence greeted them in every direction.

The towering Demon King, an 8 foot horned beast of malevolent power, surveyed the area passively.

Centuries ago, when he'd arrived, death followed for all that existed there, and he was pleased to see that after all this time, no life formed on the world again.

It was a planet lightyears away from the home world on the edge of his kingdom's territory, and this world, this once city even, was the epicenter of a large-scale rebellion he'd crushed to blow off some steam, along with the rest of the planet's populace.

His greater 8-foot stature loomed over the accompanying girl's mere 5"3, his armored, large muscular arms crossed over his burly chest as his cape and long, silver hair, blew in the sandy wind.

"Unveil it," he commanded.

Carnva, The Demon King's princess and daughter, gave her father a tired look, crossing her thin arms under a modestly ample leather-wrapped bosom, her oversized gold bracelets jangling on her wrists.

"Father, I'm sure I can handle the Earth invasion."

"That is for me to judge," his ire-laced voice casually boomed. "You realize I am sending you on this mission, several decades ahead of schedule? Underdeveloped?" This didn't even cover his daughter's penchant of slacking off from her tutoring and trials, usually to pursue those perversities she called 'hobbies'. Considering the brutal harshness of their world, where power was held above all other things, said 'all other things' being a long distance second, the Demonkin fathers didn't seem to see the obvious irony in wanting to believe in the idea of their daughters being pure and angelic. But with the Demon King, that ship had long since sailed, right over the world's edge and straight into the abyss.

Carnva gave a bratty huff and placed her hands on her exposed hips. The leather pants she wore were more like a dark bikini bottom and chaps that led to knee high boots.

"Underdeveloped? How can you say that?!" She retorted, her posture placing an emphasis on the exposed cleavage of her breasts. "Sure, they are not as big as I would like them, but underdeveloped? How cruel!"

"Do not joke," The Demon King responded, keeping his poker face strong under her mischievous grin. "You know exactly what I mean."

"Yes, yes. But, Father, you're the one who summoned ME for this mission. If you're so worried about my 'development', why are you sending me, then?"

"Because this is YOUR chance to PROVE YOURSELF not a failure." The demon king responded, his voice stern like iron.

But there was more to it than just that. Through unknown means, the barrier placed between their own world and Earth's had recently reopened far ahead of schedule. Moreso, it may only be a limited time before the door is closed again, probably by the one he planned revenge against, the human Dominion.

It was simply too tempting a chance to pass up.

With a flick of a wrist, an image formed in the thin air before them, of a strong, shirtless man in black pants, who just the image of, sent a desire through most men to punch his smooth, youthful face, and most women to sit on it.

"Unveil your power, and pass my appraisal. If you do so, you will head to Earth, to hunt down and capture the one named Dominion. Bring him to me, alive. After which, you may have that world for yourself to do as you please, after you conquer it, of course."

Carnva barely heard what her father had said, busy drooling at the etheric picture of her future target.

"UNVEIL YOUR POWER." The Demon King bellowed, shaking the humid atmosphere.

Shaken out of her daydreams, a glow began to envelop the demon princess as a hormonally motivated, vicious grin formed on her face.

"Fine, Father. As you wish."

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100 years. Her development was supposed to take 100 years. At this point in her life she was not even a 1/5th through that time.

And yet....

The demon king's trained upward as he followed her rising gaze, his once little princess staring deep into his eyes with a smile full of mischief and malice.

She giggled and moaned as she tensed her arms; biceps rivaling the size of watermelons rose from their planes, and then swelled even greater. Her hips flared, long since having turned her bikini into tatters, leaving her completely exposed infront of her king and father.

Her thigh-high boots had long since exploded into shrapnel as thighs thicker than wine barrels bulged with unknown might, calves like steel beachballs crackling. surging with raw power as sinew stretched and expanded.

The Demon King heard her occasionally deep, heaving breaths as the deltoids that flanked her head, threatened to engulf it. His once dominant, burly and armored stature was now overwhelmed by the 9-foot monolith of raw, physical yet feminine power before him.

As the princess went through her transformation, chaos brewed.

For square miles, the ground sundered, decaying into dust. Far in the distance mountains seemed to tear themselves apart. Magma billowed from deep within the planet, filling canyons and crevices as it flowed free. The mere, unrestricted unleashing of her power was tearing the world apart.

She gazed down upon him with a mischievous malice he had to steel his dark heart against, her glowing, golden eyes boring into his very being, as if she could barely hold herself in check, and was reveling in that fact.

Breaking gaze for a moment, Carnva looked herself over in adoration of all the immense muscle burgeoning from her new frame, and hefted one of her naked, heavy, wrecking ball bosoms. The Demon King kept his gaze on everything above the neck.

"Now, THIS is quite a development, wouldn't you agree?" Carnva asked, her voice booming with mirth and vigor. She took joy in the minute confusion of expressions she detected in his face at her taboo-ish teasing.

"So, Father," she her voice boomed with mirth and vigor, "is THIS enough?" Carnva finally asked, floating before him majestically, a dark aura gently wafting around her as the chaos briefly paused.

"..." The Demon King was silent.

"Because, if it isn't..." she then suddenly continued, clenching her fists, "I have PLENTY more!"

Everything instantly became magnitudes worse. Oceans boiled, winds and massive bolts of lightning ripped apart entire landmasses. The demon king watched in hidden awe, as the presence of his daughter tore apart the entire world. With the swell of every millimeter of her mighty body, the growth of each new sinew, the gain of every pound of breast and muscle, the chaos enveloped more space, and its effect grew in magnitude. With little effort, more like she was opening up a well of endless power deep within her being, she grew bigger, stronger, more untouchable by entire magnitudes with each passing second.

In less than a minute, the planet was no more than ash and debris, floating in space. Only the platform which the demon king stood, survived the destruction.

The effect of her idle will and power reached further and further, across millions of square miles of space.

The throb of a vein dictated the storms, earthquakes, and corruption of every world in the system.

The creaking tense of her burgeoning, monolithic quadriceps commanded the shattering of crust, the expulsion of internal mass. Planets and moons around the system soon rapidly fell into a familiar state of chaotic destruction, tearing themselves apart, their masses turning into rogue moons, asteroid belts, and comets to plague the system. And with the flex of her medicine ball biceps...

He noticed for a moment, a distortion of light. Turning to the source, the Demon King watched in horror as the two binary suns that made up the focus of the solar system warped and twisted against eachother, being manipulated by her unseen force, their lifespans exponentially culled, an unnatural instability nearing a critical mass. Order was dead. Her body demanded destruction, and so destruction there was.

"How about THIS?" Carnva's voice was as silky and soft as it always was, yet at the same time thundered with power as her chest expanded with even more bosom and sinew, her always cute, adorable face, sitting atop an impenetrable fortress of brawn. Is THIS enough for the task?"

The Demon King turned back around to the now titaness, now nearly double his own height, and several times his own width.

Carnva's neck length crimson hair flowed wildly about her, as she again looked down on him in more ways than one. In his eyes, she was no longer Carnva, his spoiled, mischievous princess and daughter. She was what she has been groomed to become....

No, she was beyond it.

Less than two decades of half assed tutoring and development, and she had already reached and surpassed the potential of what was projected for her. If she was this far now... how much greater could she become in the future? What was her ultimate potential? And if this was the effect of merely unleashing her power, what could she actually do the moment she put her mind to it? This was NOT what he wanted... her power, it may now be even greater than...

This could be a problem.

As the glowing golden gaze of the exuberant Demon Princess Carnva washed over him The Mighty Demon King felt horror for the second time in his entire life.

Behind her, the suns finally exploded into a glorious binary supernova. Carnva deep, glowing gold eyes never broke gaze with her father.

"APPRAISE ME, FATHER."

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Narrator: Carnva, The Demon Princess! She comes to the human Earth in order to avenge her father, The Demon King! Will it be the end for all mankind?! Or will the heroes of Earth come through once again?!

Find out in the next chapter of Nuunar! Coming out... err...  I dunno! I'm just the narrator! Get off my back.

[Vollnut]

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[ArkhamAsylum]

This was a great first look. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the story.

[thebaron]

She sounds like a nice girl, I can't wait for more.

[Vollnut]

This was a great first look. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the story.

Thank you. I'll try to get the actual chapter out... before the turn of the century. I know I'm not making Shakespeare, but at the same time I stress myself out over the smallest things so I'm slow to post anything anywhere.

She sounds like a nice girl, I can't wait for more.

Thanks.

[jhunter]

An interesting premise. Shows potential with many kinks, if it is going to be a story with more than just muscle growth. Hope to see more when you are ready.

[Elponchogrande]

This is great, nice work